Sunday, August 21, 2011

Wasted Hope (Blitz poetry form)



cracked like an egg
cracked and wasted
wasted life
wasted death
death unnoticed
death unknown
unknown desparation
unknown light
light a cigarette
light ash
ash cleansed
ash remains
remains slouch
remains a stranger
stranger revolution
stranger spins
spins the bed
spins webs
webs capture
webs kill
kill joy
kill freedom
freedom choice
freedom cheap
cheap thrills
cheap perfume
perfume lingers
perfume samples
samples vanilla
samples granite
granite held
granite earth
earth unmasked
earth people
people pleasers
people judge
judge me
judge you
you cratered
you fell
fell captive
fell crashed
crashed head-on
crashed shattered
shattered image
shattered hope
hope scrambled
hope twists
twists
hope

@laurie kolp

Prompt inspiration: Sunday Whirl

17 comments:

Eva Gallant said...

I'm left a little confused by this poem. But then I'm not very intellectual. Just wanted you to know I did read it, as I do all your posts.

Mike Patrick said...

That many front to back links had to be difficult. Looks like all the Wordle words were used too. Neat!

Laurie Kolp said...

The blitz form lends itself to confusion. Some of the wordle words led me in that direction. Thanks for stopping by!

Dr. Pearl Ketover Prilik (PKP) said...

Laurie...talk about power! that is one powerful blitz! .... terrific whirdle!

brenda w said...

I love the form Laurie. This is my introduction to it, and I think you've done it justice. Clever piece...it was a fun read.

Daydreamertoo said...

Wow I felt as if I was spinning with your words.
What a clever way you twisted them all into something that makes sense. Great use to the wordle words.

Mary said...

I haven't used the blitz form for a while, but you definitely used it effectively in this wordle poem! Laurie, I love the 'hope'ful ending!

flaubert said...

Laurie, love this form. A friend of mine told me about it some months ago. You handled it nicely.

Pamela

Deborah said...

Such energy ... this had me racing down the page!

Nanka said...

This was new for me!! But I came thumping down the stair to the bottom. It did give me the feel of walking down a stairway!!

Susannah said...

I really enjoyed this.
I found the form quirky and so very interesting. !t gave it a real addictive quality which I loved.

Well wordled and thanks for introducing me to the 'blitz'. :-)

The Gooseberry Garden said...

admirable job.
your talent inspires.

vivinfrance said...

A great format for using a heterogeneous collection of words effectively, in a giant stream of consciousness. Congratulations: a real success.

imnotaverse said...

What a great idea to use the wordle as a basis for a blitz poem. Like all great ideas, it seems obvious now it's been done, but no one thought to do it before you.

I love it!

Traci B said...

I've never heard of a blitz poem before today, but I like it. The repetition propels you forward, like stumbling down an incline and picking up speed until you're at a dead run. Fantastic use of the wordle, Laurie. :)

nan said...

Interesting form. I like the Wordle words used in blitz!

mjshorts said...

This was a great read Laurie.
I've never heard of the blitz form before - it looks like fun I feel I need to give it a go.