Saturday, June 16, 2012

It's Just An Illusion

To sketch a draft of illusion,
trace your finger across my chest-
latch on.

Refrain from
lingering
at any one spot.

Feel a current
strike your heart,
a blend of temper and lust-
watch congeal
as a crack of reality sets in.

String along spare phantasm-
the racket you’ve created
is just that.

©laurie kolp

Prompt inspiration: The Sunday Whirl 61 - blend, latch, chest, current, draft, string, crack, spare, temper, refrain, racket, trace, strike

24 comments:

Brian Miller said...

there is a nice sensuality riding just underneath the words in this...smiles....and a bit of playfulness as well...

meenarose.com said...

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As for your skin tingly illusion, Laurie... let's just say I am still smiling... so much riding beneath the surface of this one... to hesitant to life the covers, enjoying the illusion instead.

Benjamin Thomas said...

Hi Laurie!


Excellent poem and take on the prompt.
Skillfully woven words.

Mary said...

I enjoyed this, Laurie, especially the last stanza where I came up with different meanings depending on the way I interpreted 'racket.'

irene said...

I like the teasing quality of this illusion speaking of itself. Nice, Laurie.

Daydreamertoo said...

Very sensual, with an undercurrent of promise of more to come, maybe.
Lovely write!

Jules said...

Thanks for your visit... :)

While in modern language your verse reminds me of Shakespeare...
to sleep perchance to dream
What is real anyway? Though I had an inkling of what phantasm meant I looked it up just to be sure.

Noticed on the side bar that you've had a poem included in a magazine...Congratulations!

Elizabeth said...

Really like this Laurie, especially the playfulness and the sensory filled images. Wonderful use of the words.

Elizabeth

brenda w said...

The first line fascinates me, Laurie. I find myself twirling it around in my mind.

And there it is, at the end...a response to illusion's draft. Excellent write.

joanne said...

you are very gifted....I felt a tingling with the words 'strike a current with your heart'....beautifully done

Margo said...

I am fascinated. The poem gave me a completely different reading. I was mulling what I wanted to say about the strength of the speaker's tone, the underlying anger, the sharpness... and I start reading comments. I had to go back and reread the poem. I'm staying with mine :-)

Hannah said...

Laurie...I'm amazed at how well wordled this is without a whole bunch of extraneous words. You've managed to create such a moving piece with such brevity! Well done!!

Adura Ojo said...

Served right up, this packs a punch. Well crafted, Laurie.

Cheryl said...

Scintillating! I love the "racket you've created is just that" and "a crack of reality sets in". I hate when reality sets in. It makes a big crack in the universe.

flaubert said...

Love this, Laurie. From title to ending. Nice and strong.

Pamela

Eva Gallant said...

An economy of words; a multitude of meaning.

S.E.Ingraham said...

Such profoundness in such few words - very cool Laurie ... I like this a lot

http://seingrahamsays.wordpress.com/2012/06/16/a-current-spare/

Peggy said...

I like the hints of sensuality this. Nice wordling!

When Words Escape said...

I felt a sad emptiness from the speaker...perhaps the title set that tone for me.

Willow said...

Wow, I drifted through this illusion that ended craftily. Love it.

gautami tripathy said...

Very well crafted...Loved it!

under the surface

Mr. Walker said...

Just that idea of a "draft of illusion" intrigued me - and then you made it real - and then you came back to that idea of "phantasm". I like what you did with "racket" in the last stanza.

Richard

libithina said...

excellently crafted and weaved Laurie from the wordle word bank - Lib

Tumblewords: said...

So vivid and vibrant. I loved each read!