Wednesday, September 26, 2012

A Whispered Chill

"Poetry" by Alphonse Mucha



















A chance in life as children, I see
years of choice in front of thee;
let not dark knights entice thy will,
savor the voice, a whispered chill.

~~

Prompt inspirations:
3WW- chance, entice, savor
Poetry Jam- Arts Gonna Art

27 comments:

Mary said...

Ah yes, every parent's hope.....that their child will not be enticed by the dark knight's messages!

Brian Miller said...

love the heart in this...having kids is def not for the faint of heart...we hope for them...and then hope for them some more....

JJ Roa Rodriguez said...

I pray for every child... And every parent.... I love this....

JJRod'z

Chris said...

Nice wishes for the children. Well done.

christopher said...

A satisfying quatrain...

Daydreamertoo said...

Ahhh... we can only hope, they listen to the good advice and don't take the bad paths.
Lovely.

JonnyM said...

So much meaning in four lines. A poem for now and for medieval times.

Sheilagh Lee said...

Every parents dream

jaerose said...

I had a rather Arthurian scene in my mind..like every time you send a little one out into the world it's like a quest..Jae

Nico said...

I love every bit of this one, Laurie--the old-fashioned pronoun that lends a prophetic feel; the couplet form that makes me think of a wise proverb; the powerful, visceral image of "a whispered chill." All good!

Patricia Anne McGoldrick said...

Agree with Nico on the use of the pronoun.
This has all the fervency of a prayer, Laurie & is in the heart of parents everywhere!

Green Speck said...

Well written !!!

Nimue said...

lovely rhyme :)

Linda H. said...

Nice work.

Susan said...

Neat to use fortune and time for this chilling thought and cast a positive spell instead.

Dulce said...

love ths sweet neat piece. Thank you!

Shauna said...

This poem and advice is profound,
Laurie.

oldegg said...

That dark knight is pretty persistent and parents' advice is not heeded so much as is their example and by their ability to let go. A great feel to the poem.

De said...

Ooooo..."savor the voice, a whispered chill" is gorgeous, Laurie.

Peggy said...

Lovely Lauie. The rhythm of this is wonderful--as well as the wish.

my heart's love songs said...

beautiful, gorgeous, wonderful!

i love this poem, Laurie. a great take on the prompts.

the image is "Poetry" by Alphonse Mucha {and is in the public domain.}

thank you for joining in at Poetry Jam.


dani

Dave King said...

Succinct, sufficient and satisfying. Like it very much.

Mama Zen said...

Love this!

Helen said...

... a whispered plea. Lovely.

J Cosmo Newbery said...

As a soon to be grandparent, this strikes a chord!

RMP said...

the "dark knight" can be quite enticing. may there be more good choices in the end.

a very lovely piece.

Mary Mansfield said...

I love the timeless feel of this!