Saturday, September 29, 2012

(Some Things Will Never Be) Passé Composé


Photo by Susie Clevenger

Orange tape reflects
a line-up on County Lane;
yesterday's letters, hard to choose.
 
One stands with flap open
unwilling to wander away
from tangible SENTiments
 
like a parent waving arms,
"Come back to me,"
as the child walks down the road.


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Prompt inspiration- Imaginary Gardens mini-Sunday challenge (tercet)

14 comments:

Patricia Anne McGoldrick said...

How creative, Laurie! Brings back memories of French language classes, verb tense & all!

Kerry O'Connor said...

Your well placed analogy was a powerful addition to your description, and reminded us of the human element which is missing from the scene.

Robyn Greenhouse said...

I liked the image you created in the last stanza - I could just see myself being that parent!

J Cosmo Newbery said...

Quite unique imagery.

Green Speck said...

This one is really beautiful ... I loved the memories associated with it :-)

Heaven said...

That last stanza was specially piercing for me ~ Nice one Laurie ~

Brian Miller said...

smiles....nice...like the SENTiments and the parent waving there in the end is a powerful visual to end on....

Marian said...

aw, yesterday's letters, tomorrow's goodbyes.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Love the "come back to me" - a parents' refrain.

flipside records said...

I really like this:
"Yet one stands with flap open
unwilling to wander away"

And the image of the child walking down the road at the end. :)

Cad said...

What would life be without letters?

Hannah said...

Oh, this aching emptiness...Laurie, you always bring a chill with your words...emotively striking...I've missed you as well my friend!

Eva Gallant said...

Definitely a different take! I like it.

Herotomost said...

Oh how this conjures up some nostalgic feelings. Many of them revolving around waiting by the mailbox for the bus to come.....great writing Laurie...loved it.