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| "Poetry" by Alphonse Mucha |
A chance in life as children, I see
years of choice in front of thee;
let not dark knights entice thy will,
savor the voice, a whispered chill.
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Prompt inspirations:
3WW- chance, entice, savor
Poetry Jam- Arts Gonna Art
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| "Poetry" by Alphonse Mucha |
25 comments:
Ah yes, every parent's hope.....that their child will not be enticed by the dark knight's messages!
love the heart in this...having kids is def not for the faint of heart...we hope for them...and then hope for them some more....
I pray for every child... And every parent.... I love this....
JJRod'z
Nice wishes for the children. Well done.
A satisfying quatrain...
Ahhh... we can only hope, they listen to the good advice and don't take the bad paths.
Lovely.
So much meaning in four lines. A poem for now and for medieval times.
Every parents dream
I had a rather Arthurian scene in my mind..like every time you send a little one out into the world it's like a quest..Jae
I love every bit of this one, Laurie--the old-fashioned pronoun that lends a prophetic feel; the couplet form that makes me think of a wise proverb; the powerful, visceral image of "a whispered chill." All good!
Agree with Nico on the use of the pronoun.
This has all the fervency of a prayer, Laurie & is in the heart of parents everywhere!
lovely rhyme :)
Nice work.
Neat to use fortune and time for this chilling thought and cast a positive spell instead.
love ths sweet neat piece. Thank you!
This poem and advice is profound,
Laurie.
That dark knight is pretty persistent and parents' advice is not heeded so much as is their example and by their ability to let go. A great feel to the poem.
Ooooo..."savor the voice, a whispered chill" is gorgeous, Laurie.
Lovely Lauie. The rhythm of this is wonderful--as well as the wish.
beautiful, gorgeous, wonderful!
i love this poem, Laurie. a great take on the prompts.
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dani
Succinct, sufficient and satisfying. Like it very much.
... a whispered plea. Lovely.
As a soon to be grandparent, this strikes a chord!
the "dark knight" can be quite enticing. may there be more good choices in the end.
a very lovely piece.
I love the timeless feel of this!
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