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It inhabits
the ecoregion
of the victim's
digestive tract
slithers through
intestinal tunnels
ulcerates with
pustulous fangs
then recoils
until the next
attack.
~~
Go ahead,
have the last
word. I’ll watch
you flinch with
each inch as I
slither closer,
squinch at HISS-
ing sounds, rebound
venomous snaps.
Go ahead,
have the last
word. I’ll watch
you recoil as I
coil around
your hips,
squeeze you
like a wet rag
until vile drips
from your
quivering lips.
You came
to the wrong
place, go ahead
talk.
*
10 comments:
Prompt shmomt! A poem is... And you did a great job, here.
I enjoyed the first Laurie, and thought, as I'd commented on it before that the language you used brought a definite snake-like-tone with the added bonus of causing me to search out more about the disease you mention which a close friend of mine has. Your second one definitely takes on the POV and you draw your reader in very effectively with a super tense situation.
Written well, both of them...I'm glad you included the first again...I stated this before but I said that we need to respect the muse.
Warm smiles to you~Hannah
A hissing poem indeed, one of the two things that really scare me.
ha. i rather like the second...def sounds like one i would not want to messsssss with...ssssmilesssss....
Lovely offering Laurie ~ I must say the second was a stronger voice, with sounds, like go ahead and make my day ~
Loved it! Great job putting yourself in the mind of the serpent :)
This is good, Laurie. I can really feel the vileness of this serpent.
Goodness...I can hear the snake hiss. I am fascinated with snakes. They are amazing creatures.
I loved the first...and the second! Frightening and powerful, both.
Gave me chills!
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