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| Drawing Hands, 1948 by M. C. Escher Picture prompt courtesy of The Mag 180 |
If you draw my hands,
erase protruding veins.
Smooth over sun spots
with fingertip smudges.
If you draw my palms,
accentuate the major lines
of heart, head, life, fate;
read me as who I am.
29 comments:
i like the contrast between what you want them to show on the outside, but who you are on the inside of the hand...smiles...hands are so evocative....
Laurie, absolutely beautiful to my heart!
I really like how you did the reverse...the reading of the palm...very nice...
I thought the same as Brian. Enjoyed the direction you chose here.
Incisive and rather wise...
This is a very intriguing take on the prompt. I love the way it was ask to remove the sun spots with fingertip smudges.
Yes, my Granny did palm reading, she was rather frightenly accurate.
Tigerbrite
Wouldn't it be nice if we could do this,,,only show the good stuff,,, enjoyed this - makes one think,,,,
Laurie,
Congratulations on your work being included in the d'Verse anthology. A well deserved honor.
Steve K.
Loved this. I often use the concept of lifeline in poetry.
I love the use of the word "if" at the beginning of both stanzas. What I took from that was, "if" you're going to go there, and try to get some aspect of me - get it right. Well said!
really liked the palm reading and oh i wish i could erase the sunspots!!x
Just brilliant...hand to heart...you really filled in the lines!
No doubt your life line is an arty one! :)
Liked this!!
existentialism
If one is interested one can elicit a lot of info looking at the hands. This is true! Nicely Laurie!
Hank
I love this. I would say the same. I also agree with what Brian said. This is really beautiful Laurie. I agree with every single line! Well done.
Good one!:)
Beautiful. If only I could erase my liver spots - I've just had my first tiny clump!!
This one is excellent!
I like how the protagonist gives instruction in how to perceive, but then closes by "read me as I am." Beautiful.
I would want the scars and calluses accentuated as badges of honor. I am, of course, a most manly man!
I love fingertip smudges. It's a beautiful poem, Laurie.
Beautiful and wistful and real.
You have made much of the prompt. Thank you.
Fate is the line that matters most.
read me for who I am ..a powerful line..as too often people want us to conform to their own readings.
Perfect! Yes, paint me for who I am, not what you see... especially after 40 :)
Perspective indeed.....love this Laurie!!
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