Sunday, November 6, 2011

Animalistic Love

a piercing strident boom flew through the air
when your delirium set in and suddenly I was
a dappled monster trying to eat you up

with the drooling swish of a rabid wolf and
Herculean strength you stopped in mid-step
ripped your pleated clothes off then dug
your fingernails in my clammy skin

all the while screaming at perfect
shatter-crystal pitch, the demon living
within your shell emitting words that always
seem to reignite my desire for you

@laurie kolp

Prompt inspiration: The Sunday Whirl (dappled, piercing, shell, air, strident, reignite, delirium, emit, pleat, pitch, swish, seem) & Poets United Poetry Pantry

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26 comments:

Daydreamertoo said...

Ooo.... it sounds so passionate and yet, as if it will be a bit bloody too.
LOL A ripping yarn, you might say ;)
Great wordle

Nanka said...

This was so much fun at the end!! LOL!! It started off as a wild monstrous scary vampire like mystery :)
Loved the expression "shatter-crystal pitch" can picture this vividly as it comes in an ad on TV here!! :D
Enjoyed it!!

Mike Patrick said...

What an interesting relationship. I'm not betting on its survival.

mjshorts said...

Wow! The passion just leapt off the page.
Thanks Laurie for a great read.

Marianne said...

Loved "a dappled monster" and "perfect shatter-crystal pitch." Lots of spirit in this piece!

Eva Gallant said...

Hot stuff, girl!

Adura Ojo said...

Wow! I wasn't expecting that bit at the end. Hot stuff, indeed!

Thank you for your lovely comments on my blog.

Mary said...

An amazing poem. I love the changing moods in this poem. The 'hot' ending was a surpise. Loved it, Laurie.

Willow said...

Whew, I'm sweating. I love your creative mind.

madhumakhi said...

Passionate and devilish. What a combination!

Abin Chakraborty said...

it takes a lot to craft ecstasy in words as those moments do seem to elude words, at least for me.and as a lover of ted hughes' poems, I do enjoy that animal ferocity a lot.

Dave King said...

I've no idea how I would have set about that particular challenge! Incredible result. Congrats.

Wendy said...

Love it. Thanks for sharing. Cheers, Wendy

Laurie Kolp said...

Thank you all for the kind comments!

Mama Zen said...

Until the last line, I was totally picturing a tantruming toddler. I've been a mother way too long!

nan said...

What a powerful last stanza! I like "shatter-crystal pitch" - very nice!

Eric 'Bubba' Alder said...

Heavy-duty rapture here, Laurie! The title fits perfectly!

Jinksy said...

Eek! Mt ears are hurting... ♥

rch said...

I also pictured a child in the beginning, perhaps delirious with fever - great ending!

Susannah said...

I loved "perfect shatter-crystal pitch." Phew what a use for the wordle words! :-)

Peggy said...

So much in this poem of hunger and passion. A great take on the wordle for sure! I love seeing where wordles take people.

Judy Roney said...

Hot, hot, hot, Laurie! Incredible what you did with this wordle!

Elizabeth said...

They say there isn't much distance between love and hate, and that often they stand next to one another holding hands. Your poem underlines that reality. Great use of the wordle words.

Elizabeth

Isabel said...

wow, greatt write!

Morning said...

incredible.

:)

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

Wow, you surprised me (with where this went).