Sunday, November 13, 2011

What Mama Left Out

Mama had told her about the birds and the bees
long before boys rendered her motionless, made
her heart swivel, like August of last year at the
country club when Lifeguard Sean rapidly pulled

that poor kid to safety and she saw the ripples
in his golden six-pack abs, the strength in his
Popeye arms. All rationale lost balance to her
fluttering heart, made her giggly and embarrassed
when he was cleaning the pool. She wore a coral

bikini, tried to point her finger and invite him
over to her lounge chair, but he never took notice
to her eloquent sentiments because he was too busy
flirting with Fred. Mama hadn’t mentioned that.

@laurie kolp

Prompt inspiration: The Sunday Whirl (bees, balance, cleaning, coral, finger, eloquent, motionless, safety, rapidly, point, strength, swivel)

22 comments:

Nanka said...

That was much fun and a great twist at the end!! Loved how you tackled the wordle words :)

Mary said...

LOL, Laurie. You really used the wordle words seamlessly, wove a great tale, and surprised us at the end. Indeed there are a lot of things that Mama doesn't mention.

Old Raven said...

Totally unanticipated. Excellent!

Daydreamertoo said...

LOL
Typical!
Great, clever and fun wordle Laurie!

Heaven said...

What a fun story....love your creativity ~

Dr. Pearl Ketover Prilik (PKP) said...

Adorable! Thanks for the Sunday smile! The site looks terrific :)

Laurie Kolp said...

Thank you!

brenda w said...

Oh Laurie, this is damn good writing! You've captured the intensity and obsessevive nature of crushing (big time!), and the naivete' some young people carry.

I love that his eyes are set on Fred. :)

Eva Gallant said...

Like they say, All the good men are taken or gay!

flaubert said...

Really great story telling, Laurie. I love the twist at the end. There are somethings mama doesn't mention. My apologizes for not visiting earlier. My life is crazy, busy right now.

Pamela

Elizabeth said...

Being mama isn't easy. There's all that stuff you have to sort out then decide when the time is right for revelation. Mama does the best she can, but somethings might be just a bit beyond her ability to find words. Thanks for the wonderfully put together piece of writing. Fun is always appreciated,

Elizabeth

Susannah said...

LOL Brilliantly done Laurie, I loved every word! :-)

Mike Patrick said...

I can appreciated Mama’s problem. She probably had enough trouble broaching the birds and bees. The latest generation may be the first that can talk openly about gay relationships.

gautami tripathy said...

Good one!!

surface

barbara said...

Chuckles.
My mother missed that bit, too.

Janet said...

I told my 17 yr, old daughter about your poem...you know, just so she can't say I didn't tell her;)
...she laughed.

Laurie Kolp said...

lol- that's funny

Marianne said...

Loved your unexpected ending! Clever wordle, Laurie!

islandcat2u said...

very clever ending, yes! And the whole story seemed to use those tricky wordle words effortlessly!

mjshorts said...

A great read Laurie.
That twist at the end really made me smile.

iren said...

Love the twist.

Brian Miller said...

smiles...it seems we have more and more we need to explain every year when it comes to the birds and the bees...