Monday, November 14, 2011

Danger on the Other Side

Beyond the hedge danger lurks
Burdens hide as leaves take fall
Mayhem in the murky ditch
Aroused by swirls of black mold
Algae morphing into asps
Ready to strike its victims--
Stay on this side of the fence

@laurie kolp

Prompt inspiration: With Real Toads (Orion poetry form), Poetic Asides PAD (Deadly/dangerous)

15 comments:

Janet said...

This is very clever, I'm smiling because this morning I really wanted to use the word 'asps' in a poem but I could not make it 'feel' right today:) So very well done again.

Mama Zen said...

I will! Love this!

Eva Gallant said...

I thought the grass was always greener. . . .

Heaven said...

Thanks for the warning ~

Happy monday ~

Mary Ann Potter said...

Yes, I believe I will stay on this side of the fence. What imagery! So nicely done.

Mary said...

A good write, Laurie.

Jim Swindle said...

This is simple, just scary enough without over-doing it. Excellent.

Jinksy said...

Algae morphing into asps

A far cry from twinkling stars!lol

Kerry O'Connor said...

What an interesting turn your poem took. That last line rings true for many garden paths...

HyperCRYPTICal said...

I'll definitely stay on this side of the fence!

Anna :o]

Abin Chakraborty said...

loved it.the realistic details make the symbolic impact even greater.

Mary Mansfield said...

Great images in this. Very nicely done!

Kay L. Davies said...

To me, this spoke of the fears of a mother watching her young child go out, unaccompanied, for the first time. The mother's imagination (algae becoming asps) and the single line she can utter, "Stay on this side of the fence."

Kay, Alberta, Canada
An Unfittie’s Guide to Adventurous Travel

Matt D said...

I love the way one images fades into the next, and there is a general tension throughout. Very nice!

Dave King said...

Excellent advice and cleverly wrought.