Monday, November 7, 2011

Time Won’t Wait

Time doesn’t sit by the back
door like a hungry dog, it
can’t be retrieved from the
marshes or chased up a tree

rather time runs as fast as
a greyhound, packs a trail
of conditioned modalities
until you let go, break free.

@laurie kolp

Prompt inspiration: PAD Challenge
Also shared at With Real Toad's Open Link Monday

21 comments:

Kerry O'Connor said...

Your use of extended metaphor is really superb. Such an unusual comparison you chose here, yet it works so well.

turtlememoir said...

A really fresh, unique way of looking at how time runs us, until we break free... Love the ending.

Eva Gallant said...

Time waits for no man (or woman for that matter!).

Mystic_Mom said...

Nicely done, love how you put it together! Breaking free of time does certainly make it different! Reminds me of my husband's Cree family teaching us about time.

Jinksy said...

But I don't think time ever lets go of our leash...

Peggy said...

Wonderful Won't Wait poem! I really like the dog images. I was having trouble thinking of anything that won't wait, but time is certainly something that doesn't wait! Thank you for visiting my blog and commenting too.

Lilly said...

this is something new - dog comparisons. i honestly admit i never would have thought of it this way - but it works very nicely!

Mary Mansfield said...

Great imagery in this poem!

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Wow, I love the fresh take and the cool images in this poem. Time at the back door like a hungry dog....way cool!

Kay L. Davies said...

You're so right, time never sits and waits, and we can't control it...so well said, Lauri, from a fresh and different point of view. Who said everything worth saying has already been said? Obviously not true.

Kay, Alberta, Canada
An Unfittie’s Guide to Adventurous Travel

Abin Chakraborty said...

a trail
of conditioned modalities...brilliantly said.

Heaven said...

yes, time runs fast indeed ~

lovely share ~

Mary said...

Yes, Laurie, time waits for no one....keeps marching on, and we must find a way to utilze it to our advantage, knowint it is so limited.

Philip Thrift said...

Breaking the bondage of time is a very Zen thing, I've heard.

Mama Zen said...

Love that ending!

Anthony Desmond said...

unique write... grand metaphors make this a great & tight read enjoyed it a lot!

ayala said...

Time doesn’t sit by the back
door like a hungry dog....Love it!

swapnap said...

value of time is well described :)

Adura Ojo said...

Love it. Love the metaphors. So creative and unique. As someone who wrestles with time all the time, I really needed this:)

Thanks Laurie, for your lovely comments on my blog.

sablonde49 said...

Perfect opening lines, Laurie. Great poem!

Sara

Jim Swindle said...

Excellent poem. I like the opening simile.