Wednesday, June 8, 2011

AFT

At the ship’s stern, altered
Forces diffuse conflict, fond
Thoughts fall with ashes, tranquil

@laurie kolp

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Prompt inspiration: 3WW- alter, fond, tranquil


15 comments:

Andy McDonald said...

I love shorter poems with prompts. It takes more skill to include the three words here and you managed it brilliantly.

Poets United said...

Yes - this is a strong piece. You have a created a great smooth flow.

Jae Rose said...

As effortless as hoisting the main-sail..Jae ;)

Altonian said...

Hey folks! This sort of stuff is easy - just ask Laurie Kolp.

Anonymous said...

I very impressed with your use of the words in such a short poem. Beautiful and I love that last line!

Laurie Kolp said...

Thanks = )

andy sewina said...

Good thinking, and I love the acrostic message too!

Sheilagh Lee said...

you can just see the Captain at the helm

Mary said...

Beautifully stated, and in so few well - used words!

Anonymous said...

Not only the 3WW, but each word at the end of the line... wow. Very nicely done. I can see the Captain too, but what about Tenille? LOL. Amy
http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/06/09/sorry-plus-two-new-ones/

Kwee Cats and Art said...

I love the "fond thoughts falling with ashes." Beautiful poem.

Jess PJ said...

this is impressive. you used the words the well and the acrostic form is just lovely.

Thom Gabrukiewicz said...

smooth and nicely done. Flow is great.

Laurie Kolp said...

I love hearing from all of you... thank you!

Henry Clemmons said...

Ya, I'm all about quick. Nice job. Again nothing wasted and everything said. Superb.