Sunday, June 26, 2011

Sunday Offerings/ 6-26-11

For the Sake of Grace

It all began to take shape not long
after his business trip--
the copper-breath kisses he planted
on the surface of her wanting lips
like a mechanical dippy bird,
the growing silent treatment
within an ivy dream-like haze,
the flitting thoughts of swarming bees.
Inhaling pepper sand, she took the plunge
cornered him in the shade of beseeching eyes
asked him who the hell Grace was
and why he called out her name
in the heavy stillness of night’s embrace.

@laurie kolp


Prompt Inspiration: Sunday Whirl (kisses, pepper, sands, grace, copper, inhaling, flitting, shape, shade, silent, surface, haze)



*****


  Rocketed to the Fourth Dimension

Floating in the sea of space
my worries drift through time.
Medusa lost in orbit,
I prey on heaven’s climb.

Dare I trust this leap of faith,
release all inhibitions?
Pride cometh before the fall
trailing~ euphoric conditions.

@laurie kolp


Prompt inspiration: Poetic Bloomings and Jingle Poetry

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31 comments:

undercaws said...

Laurie, I like both pieces, but the first demanded a second read. I love the images of mechanical dippy bird, and flitting thoughts of swarming bees. Excellent writing, with a grand slam ending.
~Brenda

barbara said...

Yow! flitting thoughts of swarming bees. What a take on suspicion!
(I couldn't resist Grace as a name, either)

Reflections said...

Wow! was not expecting that ending on the first piece... beautifully written.

Mary said...

Excellent wordle. I liked it a lot, as it seems quite different than your usual style. And...good for her for confronting him!

Old Raven said...

Both pieces were great ... and fun, number 1 had me at the end!

Mike Patrick said...

That was an amazing grace. This prompt is bringing out some twists.

Poetry Potluck said...

superb piece.
smiles.

Poetry Potluck said...

Reminding you to join jingle poetry potluck week 41 tonight.
Any poems are welcome.
Cheers.
Always, your poetry is sunshine to us!
Bless your weekend.
xoxox

flaubert said...

Holy Cow! Laurie the wordle poem is hard-hitting. Ouch! Well done.

Pamela

annell said...

Lost my comment! Wanted you to know I loved them both!

mark said...

The first poem was quite well done. Some well used word choices and metaphors. Really enjoyed it.

Laurie Kolp said...

Thank you!

Christine said...

Ouch on the first, perhaps the second one is your grace.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Both really good poems, but I especially liked the first one - age-old story but you gave it new language - I love the dippy-bird kisses - well done.

lunawitch15 said...

wow. both are so different and unique.
terrific writing both!
Luna

signed...bkm said...

Really like that first piece on Grace....the second too..but the first my favorite...bkm

Andy said...

Oh, Oh! Someone's in trouble!
Both lovely pieces, but I'm with the majority, the first has a knockout ending!

mindlovemisery said...

These are amazing Laurie! I love the raw emotion and the exquisite imagery of the first and the flow and rhythm of the second is amazing

Susannah said...

Some great lines there, I am with the others, I love dippy bird kisses. :-)

Kim Nelson said...

Whoa!
Grace is not always the blessing it seems to be. ;-)

Neva Flores said...

I too had to go back and read this over again......Grace was a woman. This is beyond excellent.

Neva Flores said...

Rocketed truly rocks.......that euphoria will get us every time....well penned

Lyn said...

We all seek grace in our own way, I guess!! Maybe he WAS having a religious experience!!
Dippy bird...thumbs up...

Raining Iguanas said...

For the Sake of Grace = 5 Stars. I'm shaking.

Claudia said...

for the sake of grace....this really touched me..very fine write

Jingle Poetry said...

perfect.

Jo Bryant said...

A very powerful poem.

imnotaverse said...

Two good poems, Laurie. I particularly lik your take on the wordle, and using Grace as a name was clever.

Eileen T O'Neill ..... said...

Laurie,

I absolutely loved the first poem. I loved the build-up to that question!!!!

Sorry for my lateness in commenting...

Eileen

Traci B said...

Excellent pair of poems. I like your take on the wordle; very different from my own and the others I've read so far. :)

Mr. Walker said...

That "mechanical dippy bird" - such a great image for that type of passionless kiss. I like how you told this story.

Richard