Saturday, June 18, 2011

At the Threshold

Try to walk alone, bigshot
Hands in pocket, head high
Random thoughts of another
Each one with a sly motive
Slanderous gossip slithers
Heavenward-- tempers reach
Open flames they burn, too
Leaving scars on self-will
Don’t slam the door on God


@laurie kolp


Prompt inspiration: Writer’s Island (Threshold)


7 comments:

vivinfrance said...

This one's a bit frightening!

whenwordsescape said...

Laurie:
I wrote one haiku, posted it, then proceeded to reading others' posts. When I got to yours, a second haiku sprung forth ~ a bit of a response to reading your words. Here's a link: Knocking at the Door.

By the way....good job on creating a perfect square with your words! I don't know if you intended it to be such, but it seemed rather connected to a "block wall" or slammed door.

~Paula

Laurie Kolp said...

Viv- thanks?

Paula- Yes, ours would be great together... glad you like the door visual.

gsb3 said...

Very powerful poem, until the last line, which seems a little weak. It doesn't have the emotion and feeling that the rest of the poem has.

You had me from the start, and like Viv, it was quite intimidating. Great writing.

whenwordsescape said...

Laurie -

I didn't even notice the acrostic until now...and on both sides!! Well done!!

BTW, I'm adding it to my post, with a link and credit back to your site.

~Paula

Wayne Pitchko said...

nicely done Laurie....thanks for sharing

Madeleine Begun Kane said...

Another powerful poem.