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| Sick Woman, 1665, by Jan Steen Photo prompt courtesy of The Mag 138 |
the same old story every week
headaches, chills, lethargy
he thought she might be terminal
so he gathered docs and clergy
unaware a secret kept
stuffed within her pillow
made her ill, recondite truth;
she'd rather be with Willow
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46 comments:
I like the idea of something beneath the surface. This is pleasing.
Quite delightful ... wondering what kept her ill ... this call and relatively unknown truth?
Ah what Apple does to my words. That is meant to be "this small and relatively unknown truth,"
This was sad, but a "Secret", I wish she had shared it to reduce her burden !!!
haha...secrets kept in the pillow will def leave the sourness of neglect...esp if they are desires of another...
ah, those secret desires can indeed make you feel ill.
I liked "secret kept
stuffed within her pillow" :)
hah! Secret in the pillow! Well done!
Oh, yes. Secrets kept under pillows. Love this.
Love the mystery in this.
Oh...so who then is... 'willow'...LOL
The truth 'will' always 'owt'
Pun intended ;)
Secrets! so deadly - I did similar-:)
How many secrets poison our souls, yet we don't let them go? Ah, a mystery not yet solved, but illuminated well here :)
Oh love can be a strange and wonderful twist of fate! Nice point!
Love it!
In that gold silk dress she's wearing, she looks dressed for Willow's Ball. I guess she is looking for one last fling. I love the couplets and the rhyme, Laurie. Great writing. Thanks for sharing. =D
If that pillow could talk, the things it would scream about Willow ;-)
Ah! I know what secret is kept stuffed within her pillow--grin! (She whispered it to me.)
And I smile--having suspected all these years--as I press the pillow, secret and all, to her helpless mouth, nose.....and hear her final "UUUNHH!"
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What a gift! What fun work! To blanket a "mystery" under cover of numbered phrases, syllables.
You do it well, woman!
PEACE!
Steve
The secret yearnings can mean that particular affliction called 'love'. Love is in the air for which there is no remedy. It only needs time! Nicely Laurie!
Hank
How I adore this!
Secret love and sickness.
Love this Laurie!
Good thinking! I never would have thought of the pillow!
I love this. What a clever idea. It's all in the pillow. Everyone has secrets. You did a great job here.
Another winner Laurie! Very clever play with the painting. Those secrets will get you every time. Lovely rhythm to the poem too :-)
The willow, how very feminine, the moon, her little secret is out, !
hooooahhhh!!!! I loved this. What a bite, such a big idea for such a short poem. Loved this.
I know that I read this before and loved it totally--but I cannot find my comment so--let me just say that it reminds me of the plot of a brilliant Kate Chopin story "The Story of an Hour." Such hidden truths can make one ill, indeed, they may even be fatal.
Peeling back the layers ... very interesting. Loved this Ms. Laurie!
What was it? What is it, that induces ague when self administered? You have me wondering, Laurie!
I like the secret kept under the pillows ~ Nice one Laurie ~
Secrets and burdens do go hand in hand.....a lovely write Laurie!
Intriguing! I love it.
Interesting poem, I like the concept of the secret hidden in the pillow.
Fun and descriptive verse!
so sad to self-inflict such maladies!
♥
I think our pillows tend to hold lots of secrets. Very nicely done!
Pillows can be great confidants.
Pillow secrets! Nice one!
Just loved the twist at the end! Smiles.
...very clever take on this painting! I'm still stuck on a response. You wove intrigue into this quite well.
Wht a naughty lady, but he was a bit slow on the uptake wasn't he? Hiding things beneath our pillow; who has not done that? It's a clever take Laurie.
OK, not sure, but I laughed because I thought the secret was a lesbian relationship with a woman named Willow. Fantastic. It made me imagine what trickery they must have gone through to pull it off in those days.
So so beautiful.....
healing power of the soul
Oh well done!
Amma :o]
Your poem left me waiting for a follow up poem to tell more! Enjoyed your take on the picture!
Double fine!
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