Tuesday, April 2, 2013

Galactic Explosion

You said the moon
didn’t taste of cheese,
instead, a dip of Cool Whip
on your tongue, a tease

sliding down your throat
like a sweet milk shake
lighting up your insides,
a firecracker quake.

I said I wanted some
but I only got the sun,
a bitter tangy shock
that made me come undone

and when it all ended
the earth exploded from afar,
I knew at once we were complete
making love, a shining star.


Poetic Asides PAD, Day 2- A bright poem/ dark poem
NaPoWriMo- A lie


*Here is my Day 2 Remix poem*



Mary said...

Just beautiful, Laurie! This is the best kind of explosion.... Especially enjoyed the last stanza!

Laurie Kolp said...

Thanks, Mary.

Lisa A. Williams said...

Really like this poem!

Brian Miller said...

ha. nice...a little galactic love....what an image of the earth exploding in the background...and them getting the moon and you only the sun...cool write laurie...

Amrit Sinha said...

Wow ... I loved the music in it ... amazing !!!

21 Wits said...

I enjoy a great love-story!

Sarav said...

Laurie, love how you wove the stellar analogies together here, always knew the moon was more tasty than the sun :-) Wonderful poem!

Dave King said...

I needed a spot of cheering up just then - and this did the trick something fine. Thank you!

Brian Miller said...

i need a daily reminder to go over to the remixx site...ha

TALON said...

This was so sweet and perfect! A true shining star.