Wonderful! I love the imagery in the last two lines especially!
"pandemonium broke out like acne." Great line!
I never thought I'd ever see chocolate and Chopin in the same line! Thankfully, I like both!
So intriguing - love your last line. :)
Intense and intriguing wordplay.
"Pandemonium broke out like acne." What a great simile.
Amazing write! Love this. : )
there is a noir whimsy, a foreboding mirth about this piece that I find engaging...
This has got to be the most surprising ending to date.
Oohhhh .. remind me not to come near you at Willow's Ball this year! Nicely written!
I really like this. The last two lines are so, so good.
Intriguing! It feels very Agatha Christie-like. :)
Intense and challenging. Would you consider changing "of" to "all" in line 3. All good wishes.
That was death by chocolate, I presume? :)
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