Monday, July 18, 2011

Silent Death


At midnight the masquerade began
Revelers gathered in disquise
Unaware they were of deception
Hidden beneath shallow eyes

Until the time for pantomime
Death revealed her precious plan
Pandemonium broke out like acne
As chocolate waltzed with Chopin

@laurie kolp

Picture prompt inspiration: Magpie Monday

15 comments:

Mary said...

Wonderful! I love the imagery in the last two lines especially!

Eva Gallant said...

"pandemonium broke out like acne." Great line!

Lena said...

I never thought I'd ever see chocolate and Chopin in the same line! Thankfully, I like both!

Jo Bryant said...

So intriguing - love your last line. :)

Rek said...

Intense and intriguing wordplay.

annell said...

Love this!

Sioux said...

"Pandemonium broke out like acne." What a great simile.

thingy said...

Amazing write! Love this. : )

rob kistner said...

there is a noir whimsy, a foreboding mirth about this piece that I find engaging...

Dave King said...

This has got to be the most surprising ending to date.

Helen said...

Oohhhh .. remind me not to come near you at Willow's Ball this year! Nicely written!

Other Mary said...

I really like this. The last two lines are so, so good.

Tumblewords: said...

Intriguing! It feels very Agatha Christie-like. :)

Lucy Westenra said...

Intense and challenging. Would you consider changing "of" to "all" in line 3.
All good wishes.

Trellissimo said...

That was death by chocolate, I presume? :)