Wednesday, July 6, 2011

Will the Heat Ever Cease?

Heavy air stifling hot
Every breath a taxing chore
As like a nasty summer cold
Toppling nerves crash to the floor

@laurie kolp

Prompt Inspiration: 3WW- cease, heat, nasty

13 comments:

springcycle said...

I like your spare use of words to express the imagery in this poem, almost like a haiku. And I also enjoyed your interview on poetic bloomings and was really interested by the concept of "small stones" - I assume this is one of them.

Isabel said...

i felt like that before. few words with lots of imagery

Fear Not the Darkness but What lies Within said...

beautiful imagery.

cosmos cami said...

I felt my lungs tighten.
A great quick blast of experience here.

jaerose said...

When weather matches mood..sometimes you don't know if the discomfort is inside or out..you made this feel stickily claustrophobic..Jae

A Kwee Life said...

Great images. You have a flair for description and emotion. It gets difficult to tell where one ends and the other begins. I like that. Very good.

oldegg said...

Temperature extremes really are the pits. You have captured heat very well indeed.

Altonian said...

Phew! Know what you mean - we had 44C plus the other day; getting there again today too.

Nico said...

I like this! You've packed a lot in this acrostic poem, and I especially liked the comparison to a summer cold. I had a roof job to do today here in south Georgia--you described my day with accuracy!

Brian Miller said...

and thus i am off to the pool to cut that HEAT...ha

mindlovemisery said...

I love that last line. This is really fantastic Laurie

sharplittlepencil said...

Laurie, great take on the 3WW prompt. To the point... appropriate because, when you are suffering a summer cold, there's not much else to say. Hope you are better soon, hon. Amy
http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/07/09/city-summer-3ww-and-poets-united-interview/

Kim Nelson said...

Terrific construction. Laurie.

http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2011/07/09/altered-reverie/