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| Sketch by P. Kolp |
A deserted street, warm wind blowing
dust into the breathless air
ancient buildings with chipped
paint and broken windows long
vacated, and I
walking in the alley’s
middle, take note
of this once thriving
city; a barber shop, a used-book
store, post office, such and such
attorneys, school number
whatever; all signs of life now
forgotten, yet on the other
side a railroad track, a whistle
blows, I jump so high I almost fall
down a manhole, the conductor
waves, says the only way it
goes is out of here I
look ahead and hop on board.
@laurie kolp
Prompt inspiration: IGWRT’s A Word with Laurie- Perspective
17 comments:
WOW! I LOVE it! "The only place it goes is out of here."
This says a lot to me about letting go of the past, or what is broken, and moving on.
I see this as moving forward. You can either die with your ghosts or live with your future. Nice work!
btw..I posted two poems. The first one was wrong, but I had no way to remove it. This is the correct post for this challenge.
http://confessionsofalaundrygoddess.blogspot.com/2012/03/kaleidoscopic-spiral.html
"...we do not regret the past, nor wish to shut the door on it..."
--Alcoholics Anonymous, p 83-84
LOVE your perspective, both the words, and the sketch. Inspiring!
Often the best choice is to hop on board! Fine poem to your fine prompt.
I share Kerry's sentiment on this, really says a lot about the importance of moving on. Loved it!
Oh, excellent, Laurie. I love that you brought the manhole into it. I couldn't think how to do that. And jumping on board to "out of here" is wonderful.
K
Loved the line " such and such attorneys. What seems so important fades away - We must live and move foreward - let go of the past, embrace the future.
ha, got an extra ticket, i will ump upon as well...smiles....love the train as well so nice touch there...keep moving...
It speaks of letting go, and moving ahead into a brighter future.
The imagery made for another lovely read from you.
Yup, sounds like it's time to 'get out of Dodge.' Thanks for the writing prompt too Laurie!
Lots of levels this works on, the personal, and the public--so many towns and city sections are turning into nothing but train tunnels or concrete scrapbooks of a past no one wants to keep alive. Also, love the look of this blog, Laurie.That's a lovely banner by Sheila.
I so love the drawing...the little complexities of simple line drawing. Between your poem and the drawing I felt like I was watching a movie that makes me nostalgic for my childhood like Stand By Me. Wonderful writing and a great take on the challenge.
This's great..I really like how you use attorney of such and such and whatever in negating the details of the persons behind this now vacant city. You captured it well in the opening of breathless dusty air, too. Much enjoyed, thank you!
So funny I just got your comment and your name was the next on the links list! See all connected! Smiles to you!
yeah, go, get outta there!
"the only way it
goes is out of here I
look ahead and hop on board."
might as well, eh? :) - I love your perspective piece
I like this very much Laurie, especially the train leaving.I was somehow unaware that you were the one who is in charge of Imaginary Garden with Real Toads. I always enjoy your work and I plan to start regularly participating here at Real Toads. Thank you.
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