Like the set up you chose to use, as down the dreams flow, as out the smoke does blow.
Very clever, Laurie!
Creative visual form--trippy!
ha. i like the visual aspect of this...and thinking of legs off cigaretes like ash....cool concrete elements to this...smiles. happy wednesday laurie...
Very creative... I like this :)
I have to echo the comment above it is clever.
Oh I like this, and how you typed it!
Imaginatively done, brava.
Like ash..or snowflakes falling to the ground..there is a beauty in this even though the direction is down..
I loved the way you wrote "down". Interesting :-)
Cool! The poem looks like a pipe!
Very creative, legs of smoke!
Repeat: very creative, legs of smoke.I am not Linda, but BLOGGER has tried to change my name.
Cleverly created Laurie!Hank
WOw... it is like a piece of art hanging on your blog...http://unshakenthoughts.wordpress.com/2012/12/13/winter-grasses-haiku/
Creative structure and use of space to aid the story.
I like the structural esthetics. a very creative construction.
This is visually so interesting - my eye wants to read the shape like a letter of the alphabet.
I like the words dangling down Laurie, nice dreams ~
Clever, Laurie. Love the pipe dreams!
Visiting again....I see a very vivid picture through your words.
cryptic commentary.powerful and the typographic arrangement was quite interesting.rewards several readings.
This gave me a very interesting visual image. Fun. Glad you reposted it. and thanks for visiting my blog
Almost haiku-like in its brevity, yet still highly visual and evocative. The concrete aspect is just right, adding to the piece without overwhelming it. Very nice work.
You are so creative. Woww...
Dreamy, Laurie.Love the layout.
Structure is terrific, Laurie. Subject matter, dark, destructive and so cleverly presented.
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