Wednesday, February 20, 2013

No, It's Not

Before you immerse yourself in a padlocked bathroom
Attempt to flush false emotions
And ponder valid
Reasoning
With tears
Just
Wait
Just
Wait
And think;
Is it worth
The acid, dry heaves?
Is the pain worth the consequence
Twenty years later, the loss of enamel on teeth?

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Poetic Inspirations:
Poets United- Verse First: Fibonacci poems w/ Kim (I did a double reverse fib)
3WW- heave, ponder, valid

29 comments:

Brian Miller said...

nice...i like how you answer the question in the title...smiles...and you are right...it is not...but many of us put ourselves through it...

Sherry Blue Sky said...

I applaud you executing a reverse fib. I'm still pondering how to do a straight-ahead one, lol. LOVE the content, very much. And it is good advice, speaking as a person who has barely any enamel left! I now know what the expression "long in the tooth" really means!

alan1704 said...

I really like this especially "Is the pain worth the consequence", everything worth getting is worth the pain. Excellent

Unknown said...

Needs to read and discussed by every teen... twenty-something... athlete... dancer... perfectionist who works so hard to achieve or maintain "that" shape.

Mary said...

Excellent fib here..with a serious point made as well!

moondustwriter said...

I think the verse form helps in emphasizing the point - No it's not!

anthonynorth said...

I agree. No it's not.

Sheilagh Lee said...

bulima is such a horrible disease

Heidi said...

Scary topic, but very nicely told. I think that it would help start discussions.

Old Egg said...

I don't know about Bulimia, I thought my teeth were bad on account of throwing up a few pints of bitter from many nights out at the pub in my youth. I didn't have time to lock the bathroom door.

Maude Lynn said...

Amen, sister.

Ella said...

Purged emotions find another way to rear their ugly head~
Scary!
Well done...

Ann (bunnygirl) said...

Sometimes it's the mundane reasons that keep us from doing the insane.

GoddessChhavi said...

No, it's not. Good advice! :)

Susie Clevenger said...

You have said so much in so few words...Every young girl needs to hear its message.

Jae Rose said...

A part always knows how much the acid erodes you inside and out..and yet in some way it sustains you..it is a process..finding the answer..bold words..

ND Mitchell said...

Such good advice. Structured really well too.

LLM Calling said...

this came a little too close to my bones for me, but I can tell you that you've captured it really well Laurie

Lolamouse said...

So true! And kudos for the reverse fib!

Unknown said...

I'm such a dummy when it comes to poetry forms, yet you seem to master every one with ease!

Eileen T O'Neill ..... said...

Laurie,

Serious issues managed very well into this fibanacci form...
Many messages within.

Eileen:)

Optimistic Existentialist said...

I love the question being answered in the title. Great poem :)

Wayne Pitchko said...

many great lines here....thanks for sharing

Anonymous said...

your words ring true and poetic.

Anonymous said...

Reverse fib that works so well, even on a sad topic.

Anonymous said...

Reverse fib that works so well, even on a sad topic.

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

Oh, I liked the way you turned the form on its head - and gave the answer before the question - although one has to read the poem to 'get' the title.

TCPC said...

ah! not at all not at all..we often tend to signify the insignificant! loved the fib form!

Ann Brien said...

I was there, many years ago. Excellent post, thank you.