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| "Clouds" by L. Kolp |
The sky above abuzz
with deceased relatives
gathering to show respect
while he laments
the release of his father.
Emitting words explosive,
storm clouds rain down
tears as if lost years
don't matter.
He stands beneath a canopy
of limbs, beneath expression
adequate for his mother, yet
inside a parasite festers
like violent thunder
hovering.
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Poetic Inspiration~
3WW: adequate, explosive, parasite
35 comments:
intense....so touching....great lines...
And it all comes together, a heritage that hovers, one that crowds the ears and clarifies the spirit. Powerful.
ah yes the angelic court, ever present in good times and bad
have a nice Wednesday
Happy you stopped by my blog
much love...
so moving...
Powerful writing, Laurie and what a perfect accompanying photo. I love the idea of the sky "abuzz with deceased relatives". Love "tears as if lost years dont matter." I like how the weather matches the emotions he carries within.
Beautiful and sad words. The photo is excellent as well. It makes me think of the quiet vigils I hold for my father.
My post was silly.
http://dothedead.wordpress.com/2014/09/24/vile-awards-preparations-part-i-inspectors-and-parasites/
sometimes grief from estranged relatives can do this Great poem you really captured all the moods.
So many hints here but still quite mysterious. Makes me want to know more of the story! Well done.
Powerful image and words that touch the divine. All lot in this.
A wonderful capture here,Laurie.
That was intense. :-)
wow! That was powerful!
An ominous gathering of clouds almost left hovering over us ready to burst as we come to the end of this thunderous poem
I like the pathetic fallacy in your poem, Laurie.
yikes....sounds like he may explode before this is over...
Love hurts and no more so when death makes a visit. So beautifully written and illustrated Laurie.
Intense and moving. A wonder invocation of pathetic fallacy.
When I read this, it seemed to me like there could be a good story here. This poem could be placed at the beginning of a novel to set the stage for the reader.
Very powerful and intense, Laurie - just like a thunderstorm! Lovely write!
What a heavy expression of heritage.
stunning...I can feel the paralleling storms.
'thunder is a reminder of many things-when it comes it creates a shudder- a shiver of fear- very touching thought provoking lines 'clouds abuzz' deceased'merged with the ever living tree reflects the 'future positive'image and gives Hope
Laurie this is amazing...I love the metaphor of the weather and the loss and relationship in bitterness....a powerful write!
The ending was ominous Laurie ~ I too appreciate the use of weather to capture character & emotional turbulence ~
He has a lot to express in little or no time. Can feel the emotions here.
wonderful piece of writing
The Sunshine
Touching...beautifully written
Yes, they do do that.
What a powerful opening. I like the weather mirroring the human emotions around death.
The use of weather to relate to turbulence is classic. Great lines Laurie!
Hank
Brilliant and powerful...
emotional, nicely written
Beyond Clouds
A powerful write and very well written!
Laurie,
Your poem reminded me of sad times when standing in an Irish graveyard,after a funeral service. Rain beating down without any mercy, to the point where the proceedings seemed to be hurried along...Dark clouds for a dark occasion..
Eileen
Very powerful use of the words.
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