Friday, January 7, 2011

Big Tent poetry prompt: Feet

Virgin Feet at a Hoe-Down
by Laurie Kolp

Hungry eyes followed
     hot pink Ropers,
        skin-tight Wranglers
           and a mid-riff shirt
with honks, grins and “How-DEE!”
   The crowd was a’roarin’and music a’blarin’
“Welcome to the barefoot hoedown”
    Sue’s heart began racing
her palms became sweaty

wiggling      dotted     red
         toes        in

smarted at the stinging of the hay
          needles piercing silky pillows
each step of the way...

"Grab your padner, DO-Si-Do!" 

Sue          her      out      the
     danced      way       of       pain.


annell4 said...

I had a great time at the dance! Pink boots indeed!

mareymercy said...

Great job working with the shape of the poem. Loved the last line, too.

barbara said...

At least she doesn't have to worry about boots landing on her toes.

RJ Clarken said...

I've never heard of a barefoot hoedown. Have you ever been to one? I loved how you made the poem 'dance' around. Very creative!

flaubert said...

Laurie, a good description of a hoedown. I went to a few in my childhood.

Laurie Kolp said...

Thank you all for your comments!

My muse must have been to a barefoot hoedown once or twice, but not me.

Good point- stepping on toes not quite as bad this way. Hmm...

christopher said...

The First Dance

I can't believe
I had the guts to ask you
out, let alone dance
with you as if I
knew how, me faking my moves
and dripping my sweat
between my wide eyes
as I stare at you, drink you
in as you move like
all that's beautiful.

Anonymous said...

More than the words i loved how you arranged them .. as id they too danced on their own tune ;)

Terri L. French said...

Yee Ha--that was a fun one!!

James said...

What a great read. You capture that rowdy feeling and the way no amount of pain is going to stop the good times. Nice work.

Anonymous said...

The shape/line break work is clever.

Laurie Kolp said...

Thanks for your comments!

Tilly Bud said...

I love what you did with this - it's all over the place, back and forth like at the hoedown, but carefully constructed. And it was great fun ro read!

Tumblewords: said...

Great form - love the way she dances her way out of the pain - very nice piece!

Kelly said...

Ouch! Loved "needles piercing silky pillows," and the last line is perfect.

Robin said...

SO clever!

S.E.Ingraham said...

I agree with Robin - sooo clever! Such a very cool treatment of the prompt - dancing out of the pain not the least of it ...

Brenda Clews said...

Hey, a dance! Lovely!