a piercing strident boom flew through the air
when your delirium set in and suddenly I was
a dappled monster trying to eat you up
with the drooling swish of a rabid wolf and
Herculean strength you stopped in mid-step
ripped your pleated clothes off then dug
your fingernails in my clammy skin
all the while screaming at perfect
shatter-crystal pitch, the demon living
within your shell emitting words that always
seem to reignite my desire for you
Prompt inspiration: The Sunday Whirl (dappled, piercing, shell, air, strident, reignite, delirium, emit, pleat, pitch, swish, seem) & Poets United Poetry Pantry
Ooo.... it sounds so passionate and yet, as if it will be a bit bloody too.
LOL A ripping yarn, you might say ;)
This was so much fun at the end!! LOL!! It started off as a wild monstrous scary vampire like mystery :)
Loved the expression "shatter-crystal pitch" can picture this vividly as it comes in an ad on TV here!! :D
What an interesting relationship. I'm not betting on its survival.
Wow! The passion just leapt off the page.
Thanks Laurie for a great read.
Loved "a dappled monster" and "perfect shatter-crystal pitch." Lots of spirit in this piece!
Hot stuff, girl!
Wow! I wasn't expecting that bit at the end. Hot stuff, indeed!
Thank you for your lovely comments on my blog.
An amazing poem. I love the changing moods in this poem. The 'hot' ending was a surpise. Loved it, Laurie.
Whew, I'm sweating. I love your creative mind.
Passionate and devilish. What a combination!
it takes a lot to craft ecstasy in words as those moments do seem to elude words, at least for me.and as a lover of ted hughes' poems, I do enjoy that animal ferocity a lot.
I've no idea how I would have set about that particular challenge! Incredible result. Congrats.
Love it. Thanks for sharing. Cheers, Wendy
Thank you all for the kind comments!
Until the last line, I was totally picturing a tantruming toddler. I've been a mother way too long!
What a powerful last stanza! I like "shatter-crystal pitch" - very nice!
Heavy-duty rapture here, Laurie! The title fits perfectly!
Eek! Mt ears are hurting... ♥
I also pictured a child in the beginning, perhaps delirious with fever - great ending!
I loved "perfect shatter-crystal pitch." Phew what a use for the wordle words! :-)
So much in this poem of hunger and passion. A great take on the wordle for sure! I love seeing where wordles take people.
Hot, hot, hot, Laurie! Incredible what you did with this wordle!
They say there isn't much distance between love and hate, and that often they stand next to one another holding hands. Your poem underlines that reality. Great use of the wordle words.
wow, greatt write!
Wow, you surprised me (with where this went).
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