Thursday, March 10, 2011

Big Tent Poetry: Science poem

Scientific Coping

A thin layer of pollen yellowed
the window to his hungry soul
searching ever onerous,
incantation blue then whole.

Hypocrisy, false alibis-
he said, you said, I said, me;
sweet honey intoxicant
bearing freedom, ecstasy.

Soaring, flying, gliding
airy breeze, smoky dream;
hallucinatory alien
sated wisdom, milky cream.

The boy whose name is Aumen
copes with choices he has made,
alone, but never lonely
haunting demon’s esplanade.


Unknown said...

The last stanza is beautiful!
Here's mine:

Maggie said...

Beautiful piece.

gautami tripathy said...

Loved it all!


Anonymous said...

This is stunning. So many images came to mind and the poem left me wanting to know more.

flaubert said...

Laurie, this is beautiful.
I love the rhyming, it flows
so well.
Is this the boy from the smell of bacon poem?


anthonynorth said...

Beautifully done.

Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis Hall said...

fabulous imagery,
you blow me away.
keep it up.

I posted mine too,
When Science Becomes Political

Laurie Kolp said...

Thank you!

Yes, this is the same boy who lives with his grandparents.

More is yet to come...

Madeleine Begun Kane said...

Amazing imagery!

Terri L. French said...

wow how do you get people to read your blog? haha nobody comes to mine!
This is a lovely piece. Ii really like the flow of it.

Anonymous said...

I'm hoping wonderful things happen for him...I'm the eternal optimist!

Deb said...

A complicated story full of beauty.

Tumblewords: said...

Lovely rhythm, it sings of the boy and his dreams...

cathy said...

Simple beautiful with all the images

Brenda Clews said...

I, too, know a little boy named Aumen, also part of a parental struggle, triangle, split, though his parents are happily together and he is a happy little boy, and so I did a double take, and then could identify more closely with your poem. Yes, while we think coping is an art, there is a science to it. :)

annell4 said...

Lovely piece! Thanks

Anonymous said...

The piece is a wonder, it lingers. Beautiful!

Mike Patrick said...

This to me is what poetry is all about: a captivating subject held together with a flawless word flow, lovely rhyme, and stretching the vocabulary to find the exact word to achieve perfect rhythm. Fantastic.

nan said...

The mystery in this, building on the last, is palpable. I can't wait to read more. The imagery is dreamy throughout. The second stanza is intriguing!

Laurie Kolp said...

Thanks all.

Brenda- That is ironic b/c the name Aumen just came to me... from where I do not know. I had no idea it was even a real name.

Judy Roney said...

Wow. The descriptions and imagery produced is amazing. Well done, Laurie!

Judy Roney said...

Love the descritions and imagery it produces. Bravo!

Anonymous said...

wow, you are doing superb job here.


Thanks for the lovely contribution to potluck on week 25,

week 26 is open NOW, we treasury your poetry

and welcome you in in your personal convenience…old poems are welcome!