A thin layer of pollen yellowed
the window to his hungry soul
searching ever onerous,
incantation blue then whole.
Hypocrisy, false alibis-
he said, you said, I said, me;
sweet honey intoxicant
bearing freedom, ecstasy.
Soaring, flying, gliding
airy breeze, smoky dream;
sated wisdom, milky cream.
The boy whose name is Aumen
copes with choices he has made,
alone, but never lonely
haunting demon’s esplanade.
The last stanza is beautiful!
Loved it all!
This is stunning. So many images came to mind and the poem left me wanting to know more.
Laurie, this is beautiful.
I love the rhyming, it flows
Is this the boy from the smell of bacon poem?
you blow me away.
keep it up.
I posted mine too,
When Science Becomes Political
Yes, this is the same boy who lives with his grandparents.
More is yet to come...
wow how do you get people to read your blog? haha nobody comes to mine!
This is a lovely piece. Ii really like the flow of it.
I'm hoping wonderful things happen for him...I'm the eternal optimist!
A complicated story full of beauty.
Lovely rhythm, it sings of the boy and his dreams...
Simple beautiful with all the images
I, too, know a little boy named Aumen, also part of a parental struggle, triangle, split, though his parents are happily together and he is a happy little boy, and so I did a double take, and then could identify more closely with your poem. Yes, while we think coping is an art, there is a science to it. :)
Lovely piece! Thanks
The piece is a wonder, it lingers. Beautiful!
This to me is what poetry is all about: a captivating subject held together with a flawless word flow, lovely rhyme, and stretching the vocabulary to find the exact word to achieve perfect rhythm. Fantastic.
The mystery in this, building on the last, is palpable. I can't wait to read more. The imagery is dreamy throughout. The second stanza is intriguing!
Brenda- That is ironic b/c the name Aumen just came to me... from where I do not know. I had no idea it was even a real name.
Wow. The descriptions and imagery produced is amazing. Well done, Laurie!
Love the descritions and imagery it produces. Bravo!
wow, you are doing superb job here.
Thanks for the lovely contribution to potluck on week 25,
week 26 is open NOW, we treasury your poetry
and welcome you in in your personal convenience…old poems are welcome!
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