Within the pelting rain curtain
a giant face stares at me
demanding that I turn three times
gradually my arms outstretch
like a helicopter whirling away I spin
one, two, three
sharp raindrops ricochet
as black gloves transform to wings
I turn to my blackbird lover
and we fly into the night like planes.
@laurie kolp
Picture inspiration:
Magpie Tales
Also posted at
Real Toads, Open Link
26 comments:
this piece truly resounds with a poetic depth. Amazing imagery created beyond the image itself, moving it like a masterful painting.
Like a helicopter...yes...
oh yes - what a beautiful surprise.
I love this and can picture this...bird and woman flying off into the clouds! Ingenious!
She achieves a new dimension with this one -- nice!
Ooh, I really enjoyed this. Very lovely.
Oh my gosh! Those last two lines are so cool.
A nice image!
I love this...a real enchantment..beautiful!
Woman and bird flying in unison. Fly United!
Hank
Very nice.
ha a nice bit of magic in this...have funon the wing...smiles.
lovely and moving, very nicely done
Laurie, how lovely! I can see her spinning. Flying.
This is a wonderful piece of magical realism. I really enjoyed the imaginative scene.
I can see the giant face too! Well spotted! LOL
Standing in the rain (or under the shower, for me) makes one want to do that, doesn't it - to turn and turn, as if by doing so one really could fly.
A lovely, engaging write on the image - clear to see your imagination (if nothing else) took flight. :)
I LOVE this, especially the last two lines. Wow!
Very nice transformation, Laurie.
Magical!
Wings, and a blackbird lover...perfect!
Kay, Alberta, Canada
An Unfittie’s Guide to Adventurous Travel
Interesting ...these poems have been such fun to read ... and you know how I relate to you flying off with your black bird lover. ;)
You flew away to a specialy plane ...
Magical!
Anna :o]
Intriguing and beguiling~ Beautiful!
Nice transformation. Thank you.
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