Saturday, May 21, 2011

Writer's Island

Icy Relief

A school carnival
Kids spread like wildfires
In the sizzling Texas sun, bacon
Bouncing off the concrete slab
Drops of sweat a salty treat
As one mom works the relay booth
Her skin pancakes on the griddle
Until another mom shows up
And chills the air for everyone

@laurie kolp
*Prompt inspiration: Writer's Island


annell4 said...

That sizzling Texas sun, I love this one@

Mary said...

I like what you did with this prompt, but even though the one mom showed up and chilled the sizzling sun she doesn't sound like a very welcome presence to me.

Laurie Kolp said...

Thanks... and you are right, Mary.

E. Johnson said...

Love the line "her skin pancakes on the griddle." Great imagery!

Wayne Pitchko said...

nicely done Laurie.....thanks for sharing your words

AM said...

wonderful wording..

De Jackson said...

Love this, Laurie. I think we all know a mom like that, unfortunately!

Anonymous said...


anthonynorth said...

Some very tasty lines in this one.

vivinfrance said...

I love the idea of kids spreading like wildfires. A happy poem. Thank you.

Anonymous said...

Oh, man, I know that other mom, the buzzkill who chills the air...! Good work, Laurie! Amy