Sunday, January 22, 2012

Warning: A Small Package

Photo: Boris Hoppek

She came in a small package
fleece worn and ribbon tied
innocent and modest, or so she seemed
with silky smooth skin
a fountain of milky pearl
wrapped up like a bow
laid upon for the taking
temptation on a platter
this grackle, waiting to attack.

~~



@laurie kolp

Picture inspiration: Magpie Tales

32 comments:

rel said...

an ode to the sacrificial lamb, so-to-speak. ;)
nice.
rel

Abin Chakraborty said...

'temptation on a platter'...fantastic.loved it Laurie.and thanks so much for your regular comments :)

Jack Edwards Poetry said...

I really like the last line in this poem. Great stuff.

Jinksy said...

I've heard of 'grockles', but 'grackles' are a new breed to me - explanation, please?

Laurie Kolp said...

Thanks. Jinksy- I added a picture of a grackle, which is just another blackbird.

anthonynorth said...

What an excellent ending.

Suz said...

AH,GRACKLE....LOVED IT

Friko said...

you're mean. It's such a silly picture (what does it mean?) the model is suffering enough without being attacked by a crow.

Laurie Kolp said...

She is the grackle.

Tess Kincaid said...

Yikes!

Anonymous said...

Whew! Loved it. :)

"temptation on a platter
this grackle, waiting to attack"

~Shawna
rosemarymint.wordpress.com

Heaven said...

Your last line was the clincher ~

Nice one ~

http://a-sweetlust.blogspot.com/2012/01/sevenling-woman.html

Mary said...

Wow, that ending really surprised me.

http://inthecornerofmyeye.blogspot.com/2012/01/twisted-magpie-tale.html

kaykuala said...

Grackle..hm! The ending is really something!

Hank

Brian Miller said...

ugh, yes temptation does not come in ugly packages and once you let it in the door it will certainly not go away easy...

The Unknowngnome said...

Great contrast in pics with your words merging.

Kathe W. said...

this is great-love the pairing with the grackle!

J Cosmo Newbery said...

Good things come in small parcels but the big ones are more fun to unwrap.

Dave King said...

I've just seen this on Brian's blog and commented on it, thinking the image had been found by him, not realising it is a Magpie prompt. How stupid can you get?

Your poem resonates and has precisely the same feel as the image. Both have great beauty, of thought as well as aesthetic beauty. I had to look up grackle, though!

Mary Mansfield said...

Great twist at the end of this poem. Loved it!

Mama Zen said...

Nice ending!

Susie Clevenger said...

Ah temptation...a beautiful one..didn't expect the ending...nice work

robkistner said...

helpless temptation, but is she powerless or powerful...?

Claudia said...

smiles...this grackle is probably not the only one, waiting to attack...i like your take on the prompt laurie

Yvonne Osborne said...

Owww...you surprised me. I loved, wrapped like a package, and that damn bird. Yeah....they go for the eyes first.

Great take on a disturbing image.

Tumblewords: said...

Wow! Lovin' this...

James said...

Nice! And I love that grackle waiting to attack :)

Trellissimo said...

So that's what a grackle is!

Lydia said...

I loved the descriptive phrasing of this, and I loved the surprise.

izzy said...

I had a flash of a bride-
small offering you know- Thanks.

JJ Roa Rodriguez said...

Nice take from start to end...

JJRod'z

Lolamouse said...

Not what she seems, eh?