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| Photo: Boris Hoppek |
She came in a small package
fleece worn and ribbon tied
innocent and modest, or so she seemed
with silky smooth skin
a fountain of milky pearl
wrapped up like a bow
laid upon for the taking
temptation on a platter
this grackle, waiting to attack.
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@laurie kolp
Picture inspiration: Magpie Tales
32 comments:
an ode to the sacrificial lamb, so-to-speak. ;)
nice.
rel
'temptation on a platter'...fantastic.loved it Laurie.and thanks so much for your regular comments :)
I really like the last line in this poem. Great stuff.
I've heard of 'grockles', but 'grackles' are a new breed to me - explanation, please?
Thanks. Jinksy- I added a picture of a grackle, which is just another blackbird.
What an excellent ending.
AH,GRACKLE....LOVED IT
you're mean. It's such a silly picture (what does it mean?) the model is suffering enough without being attacked by a crow.
She is the grackle.
Yikes!
Whew! Loved it. :)
"temptation on a platter
this grackle, waiting to attack"
~Shawna
rosemarymint.wordpress.com
Your last line was the clincher ~
Nice one ~
http://a-sweetlust.blogspot.com/2012/01/sevenling-woman.html
Wow, that ending really surprised me.
http://inthecornerofmyeye.blogspot.com/2012/01/twisted-magpie-tale.html
Grackle..hm! The ending is really something!
Hank
ugh, yes temptation does not come in ugly packages and once you let it in the door it will certainly not go away easy...
Great contrast in pics with your words merging.
this is great-love the pairing with the grackle!
Good things come in small parcels but the big ones are more fun to unwrap.
I've just seen this on Brian's blog and commented on it, thinking the image had been found by him, not realising it is a Magpie prompt. How stupid can you get?
Your poem resonates and has precisely the same feel as the image. Both have great beauty, of thought as well as aesthetic beauty. I had to look up grackle, though!
Great twist at the end of this poem. Loved it!
Nice ending!
Ah temptation...a beautiful one..didn't expect the ending...nice work
helpless temptation, but is she powerless or powerful...?
smiles...this grackle is probably not the only one, waiting to attack...i like your take on the prompt laurie
Owww...you surprised me. I loved, wrapped like a package, and that damn bird. Yeah....they go for the eyes first.
Great take on a disturbing image.
Wow! Lovin' this...
Nice! And I love that grackle waiting to attack :)
So that's what a grackle is!
I loved the descriptive phrasing of this, and I loved the surprise.
I had a flash of a bride-
small offering you know- Thanks.
Nice take from start to end...
JJRod'z
Not what she seems, eh?
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