Wednesday, January 25, 2012

Subcutaneous Communication

Over, under, out -- Roger
acquired an infection
that with quite some introspection
and a wreck he had resulting
in reactions slow and lumbered
a slothful snail they called him
prompting great consideration
of a viral invasion deadly
in his network crashing body
creating bubble condensation
on his skin, this Trojan foe
a risk of life taken
for hooking up this microchip
to the world-wide web;
over, under, out.

@laurie kolp

Prompt inspirations:
IGWRT Kenia's Wednesday Challenge (future)
 3WW (bubble, lumber, wreck)

26 comments:

Jessica Prescott said...

That was fun to read, if not fun to experience. Good job.

Fireblossom said...

Oh, doctor! You kicked this prompt's butt!

Kerry O'Connor said...

What a very unusual and original analogy, and brave use of syntax. I must agree with Fireblossom. Well done.

Sheilagh Lee said...

wonderfully done.

Altonian said...

Have to admire this - a remarkable configuration of words and ideas.

Ramesh Sood said...

Awesome..happy to be here..

Daydreamertoo said...

It sounds as if he needs to see a doctor asap LOL

David said...

Cute! Poor Roger!

hedgewitch said...

Loved this one Laurie--you've got concise tied down and screaming for mercy--and lots of jumping imagery. Great take, esp the tech vocabulary--that really rocks the whole piece.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Okay, reading what all of you have done with this prompt is removing my confidence! Way to write!

Brendan said...

Thanks for reminding me to sanitize my comment before sending it in. I still have no idea what the point of the prompt is but I think you've got something properly digitized and harmonized. :) Brendan

Marian said...

i love this, it SOUNDS great, i read it out loud a couple times. bravo!

Kay L. Davies said...

A futuristic poem, indeed. I had to go to the past in order to point to the present as their future, but you've definitely done futuristic as per the prompt SO well.
K

Rinkly Rimes said...

This rollicks along at a great pace and even has an air of urgency.

Susie Clevenger said...

You certainly captured the form...a computer virus...I bow to your talent!

Teresa said...

I love it! What a fun poem.You really did justice to the prompt.

Eva Gallant said...

Great job! (damned computer viruses!)

Brian Miller said...

haha nice...ack i have computer viruses...they have crashed several of my computers...

Mary said...

Viruses of any kind make me sick! Computer or other. Yes, you rocked this prompt, Laurie.

J Cosmo Newbery said...

I'll never look at a Roger the same again.

Raven said...

Well, by now you probably know that I am not writing as much poetry and doing even fewer prompts ... so I don't know the prompt here. But wow what a poem!

Carrie said...

great use of the 3WW prompt. I love the images your poem evokes. It's fun and playful.

oldegg said...

This more than just playful it is is the realization that we are no more than machines ourselves.

jaerose said...

Have you read the Robert J Sawyer trilogy? I love the thought of virtual minds..beings...they are real..I'm sure! great write..Jae

Shauna said...

adorable. your orchestration of words - genius!

Margaret said...

We have been warned. Computers will be our undoing... Perhaps they will survive long after we are gone? :)

This even has the "rhythm" of how I imagine a computer would "talk".